Dry Land
Suddenly, the heavens opened, and it started to rain…
when I was a little girl, I was on a boat and we were just sailing
a log when a big storm came and it was so big.
We got washed up on the land. It was so scary.
I was lucky that I was still alive.because that was a really big
storm. When we were on the land we saw lots of trees and rock
that was cracked, lots of people were exploring the island but they
did not find anything about the island. But one of the men that
went up the mountain noticed that they were on a volcano and he
said that it could explode any second. Everyone was screaming
so so so so loudly but the captain said what are you doing we need
to get out of here. So all of the men and ladies ran. I did not run,
I hid behind some rocks. And it began to explode, I was so lucky
I stayed alive. After the storm there were rocks and dust
everywhere I found a little cottage on a little beach. It was all
wrecked but I made it so much better so I stayed in it for a little
while and found some food. After a few days some people came to
see the land and they found me and they gave me some watermelon
to eat. Then they take me home.
when I was a little girl, I was on a boat and we were just sailing
a log when a big storm came and it was so big.
We got washed up on the land. It was so scary.
I was lucky that I was still alive.because that was a really big
storm. When we were on the land we saw lots of trees and rock
that was cracked, lots of people were exploring the island but they
did not find anything about the island. But one of the men that
went up the mountain noticed that they were on a volcano and he
said that it could explode any second. Everyone was screaming
so so so so loudly but the captain said what are you doing we need
to get out of here. So all of the men and ladies ran. I did not run,
I hid behind some rocks. And it began to explode, I was so lucky
I stayed alive. After the storm there were rocks and dust
everywhere I found a little cottage on a little beach. It was all
wrecked but I made it so much better so I stayed in it for a little
while and found some food. After a few days some people came to
see the land and they found me and they gave me some watermelon
to eat. Then they take me home.
Very descriptive Kezia, what an adventure, I'm glad the girl in the story was rescued!
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your writing with us. I like how there is a lot going on in your story - a storm, an exploding volcano and various characters doing different things. Ka pai Kezia!
ReplyDeleteKa pai Kezia! The start of your story really hooked in the reader and it took us on a journey with the little girl. Next step would be to use speech marks when a character is talking. Keep up the awesome blogging!
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