It all happened so quickly! One minute he was standing on the platform, the next he was hurtling through the air, hanging on for dear life… Today I was going on a fast train to school. I was going to train stop 5. When I got there I realised that I was late for the train because my train just went past so I jumped on the train. I left my shoes on the platform but I did not mind. A man saw me and said “ Hang on little boy” when the man said that I realised that my hands were slipping off the train. I got scared and said to the man “I'm scared” and the man said to me “I'll get you” but he could not catch the little boy. He was too far away for the man. So the man said to the little boy “ you are too far away for me”. Luckily I saw an open window so I could get in. I said to myself that I can do it. I tried and tried. I finally got to the window and into the train.
Ka pai Kezia! It is great that you are sharing your writing to your blog and I really like how the little boy did not give up even though he was scared. Next steps would be to get someone at home to check your writing before you publish, so they can help you edit your work. Keep up the active blogging!
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