Holding on tightly to the support rope, the man made his way towards the top and that is where the story starts.The scared man walked up the path towards the very top of the building with his boss. The man was wearing a warm black jumper and black pants. It was windy and the sky was grey. The mans jumper was flapping in the wind because it was so windy. When he got to the top of the building his boss said "I will go first" so the man let his boss go first. The man waited and waited for his boss to go to the other side of the building, but he was taking a long time to cross. But finally he made it. The man started to move across the ledge and suddenly slipped. So his boss had to come back out to help him.
Kia ora Kezia!
ReplyDeleteIt is really awesome that you are practicing your writing skill. I can see that you have been working on including punctuation to your writing and you have started describing the scene/characters, but I would love more descriptive words. This will help your readers to visualize the story even better.
Keep up the active blogging!
NJ